Protagonists and their looks

There are good looking people just as there are utterly frightful looking people, ie: a hag (to look at). If everyone is beautiful on the outside, you have Mary Sue-ism or something similar to it. If someone is physically beautiful in fiction, they need to be flawed – and not the cliche ‘feels invisible (when everyone’s attention is on them)/deaf composer syndrome’ etc. The heorine, sure, she can be insecure about her image – that’s realistic, and probably sympathetic, though I speak of this as a guy. I know it’s easy to fall into the trap of having the opposite sex character’s in an author’s work to look amazing… especially if the same-sex characters aren’t. I don’t suspect gay writers would find the reverse true – that their same-sex-as-author characters are visions of gods/goddesses, at least in the first draft/when the writing is wish fullfillment.

If, on the flip side, beautiful people don’t exist, then you’re reading Literary fiction :p (maybe).

People who are beautiful outside but mean, rotten EVIL on the inside, well, that there is your attractive antagonist. If they’re hideous on the outisde but beatiful on the inside, that’s your misunderstood anti-hero. If they’re beautiful inside and out, that’s your classic hero, which is seriously outdated and in our society as it is, seen as a typical a detractor.

On this note, I used to have friends who were unattractive inside and out; they bitched and they moaned about everything, dragging me down to their level. Then I met one person who is lovely inside and out, and that seemed to change my whole experience. Now I look for, and gladly accept, people who are attractive inside and out, though if gun-to-my-head I had to choose, I’d put inner quality in first place (though I’m weak – I like them both and definitely would prefer to have my cake and eat it, so to speak).

Sample of Book 2

Since I haven’t blogged in a while… here’s what I’ve got so far of book 2, which I’m thinking of calling The King of Flames (going for a trilogy with a name theme: Children of Fire, King of Flames, and maybe Brimstone Dawn).

Yeah, Shadow Chaser – some might have known it as Elemental, which I wasn’t exactly wedded to – was going to be the next one, probably in a twin pack with Storm Scion. Now I think I’ve got something better, and by that I mean longer and more trilogy-suited. I might post the outlines in the next post.

Chapter 1

The beat-up white van rattled along a circuitous path, the long way around the city, with a troll on board. Xavier Brock drove, while his seer Collin Skye rode shotgun. Modok, half-troll leader of the deceased Rocksmasher goblin clan, sat chained in the very back row of seats. Two guards, decked out in gunmetal powered armour, sat on either side, the chains clipped onto their suits’ gauntlets.

The vehicle couldn’t go fast enough to really justify seat belts; the only ones wearing any were the two guards.

“We’re coming up on Creek Street now,” Xavier called back to the half-troll.

Modok grunted.

Xavier managed to steer the van through several gaps between obstructions—other cars, buses, trucks—and over anything small enough. At last they saw Central Station on the crest of the hill.

“Better yet,” Collin said, “isn’t it dark enough for you now? So you don’t have to fear petrification?”

The only thing in the way was a large gang of bandits partying along Ann Street in the dusk light, metal fuel drums throwing up flickering flames that showed their kills lying around unceremoniously.

“Bandits!” Xavier called out. The two guards armed their weapons, a shotgun and a laser rifle. It was a token force, but no one knew their exact plans. The bandits were just another obstacle to negotiate. Hopefully.

There was only one way through.

The van came to a halt as the bandits became aware of it. One, likely their leader based on the fact that she was wearing the most bling over her spike-studded leather armour, came forward and inspected the van. Her head was shaved bare except for a bright pink Mohawk. She carried an assault rifle slung over one shoulder, and a lawnmower blade, welded to a piece of construction lattice to make an impromptu sword, dangled at her tiny hip. Spikes pierced her skin everywhere that wasn’t tattooed, and some places that were.

“Looky here boys,” she said. “Why, it’s the second most powerful man in the city!”

The bandits began to edge closer with their weapons grasped tightly.

Xavier leaned out the window. “Excuse me. We need to pass through.”

“There’s a toll,” the woman said.

“That’s great,” Xavier said sarcastically. “Because we’ve got a troll.”

At a signal two large bandits opened the side door—to find a pair of weapon barrels pointed at their faces. They smartly backed away, as the two guards and Modok stepped out of the van.

The two bandits fled back to the protection of the group.

“A troll for a toll,” the bandit leader mused. “But you can’t just stroll, or we’ll… CRUSH YOUR SKULL!” With that the woman opened fire on the van. Howling with glee, the other bandits joined in, joined in turn by several other bandits in the vicinity. In seconds it was an orgy of gunfire and screeching as all the bandits filled the van with holes.

Xavier and Collin activated their shield amulets just in time. They also had sense to duck beneath the dashboard. The guards weren’t as lucky. Caught out in the open, they could only fire back, and they were outnumbered two to one. There was screaming and panic in the darkness as Xavier drove the van through the bandit group, ramming into and running over any unfortunate enough and slow enough to get in the way.

Then he hit the land mine.

Plots and Markets

I ordered two books recently, the Australian Writer’s Marketplace to be all professional and business-like, and 20 Master Plots because I’ve wanted it for a while, all I had was some notes that are a bit… eccentric, and because it’s a book on plots. I got the Marketplace today, and the bookmark I’m using is the glossy flyer for itself from the state library. This book is going to have some issues to work out with a psychologist.

Vision critique

I went to the first critique group meeting in months, yesterday, for Vision writers, a group founded by successful Brisbane writers. And someone said that they enjoyed this draft better than the last. Which isn’t even remotely correct because I’m 100% certain – okay, 99% certain – this was A) the first draft and B) I haven’t submitted it before. I may have submitted an earlier version of the prologue, 3 years ago, but this one was rewritten from scratch, and after Children of Fire in its current (and likely one draft from final) form.

So this tells me that, unless I have submitted part of it before, my first draft reads like a second draft.

It’s validating to have someone suggest I’ve reached a point where I’m competent as a writer. I have had some elderly people compare my random journal-post samples as far higher quality than anything teenagers on the internet churn out… but that’s not really saying a lot, considering most of that is bilge from what I’ve read (except that from a certain 10 year old I read once… holy crap was that kid good! Look out for someone named Trevor something making news as an accomplished author before finishing school).

Am I a proud person? Or am I humble? Or am I ‘bipolar’ in that I can swing from one to the other depending on context, mood, or whatever? Or maybe I’m just True Neutral in the sliding scale of humble/proud? Just one of those things that one needs to be able to answer about themselves sooner or later, I guess.

 

Depressing toasted sandwich maker

I dislike the sandwich toaster we have at my place. It depresses me. It ruins my dreams, even. More specifically, it squashes the sandwiches flat, doesn’t seal them, and the cheese that trickles out doesn’t even get remotely grilled. Sigh. It depresses me, after a childhood of sandwich toasters that made toasted sandwiches enjoyable. I think we need a new one.